When I was doing second pass editing on “Harvest of Blood,” I asked Copilot AI for feedback on a clip of text that I edited. Specifically, I asked about credibility and immersion as that was what I intended to add to the laconic draft during this editing step.
Below is Copilot’s analysis…
Your text is quite immersive and detailed, creating a vivid and realistic scene for the reader. Here are a few points that contribute to its credibility and immersion:
1. **Detailed Descriptions**: The vivid descriptions of the battlefield, the scavenging birds, and the medic’s actions help paint a clear picture. The mention of specific animals and their behaviors adds to the realism.
2. **Sensory Details**: Including the medic’s reactions to the smells, sounds, and sights of the battlefield makes the scene more tangible. Her evolution from being disgusted to accepting her surroundings shows character development.
3. **Medical Procedures**: The steps the medic takes to assess and treat the injured girl are detailed and methodical, reflecting a realistic approach to battlefield medicine. The frustration she feels at not following an orderly checklist adds a human touch.
4. **Emotional Depth**: The medic’s personal quest to find her brother and her emotional responses to the battlefield and her patient add depth to her character, making her more relatable and engaging.
5. **Realistic Challenges**: The medic’s struggle with inadequate supplies and the harsh conditions of the battlefield are realistic challenges that enhance the story’s believability.
Overall, your text effectively combines detailed descriptions, sensory details, and emotional depth to create a realistic and immersive scene.
Jaycee Woods 
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